大作文
单号版：
What a compelling and thought-provking drawing it is! As is vividly presented in the interesting and instructive cartoon above, ……（句1）,in contrast,……（句2）。What on earth does the drawer really attempt to convey?
注释：thought-provking 中间的是连字符，不能去掉，不管它是位于同一行还是两个不同的行。
Compelling and thought-provking 两个ing 押尾韵，俗称绝句
Interesting and instructive 两个押头韵
in contrast 路标性词汇，前后形成对比。
句1一般用来简单描述漫画内容，句2和句1形成对比
On earth:究竟 加强语气
Drawer=作者。不能写author显得俗气
Really:可去掉，但不丰满
第二段
Simple as the image is the implications（启示）mirrored（反映）are apprantly far-reaching（深远的）。Initially such a phenomenon as revealed in the picture has aroused wide-spread social concern（关注）。Nowhere in the history has the issue of sth（其中of sth也可省略不写）been talked about so much as in our society today（历史上任何时刻都比不上我们的时代这样关注这件事情）
In the second place, the painting reveals an upsetting story（事情）and similar events happened and happening are heared or reported in nearly all aspects of our life.（27字）Additionally,the painter intends to convince us that a package of programs（一揽子项目，计划，方案）should be initiated to reverse the grim stuation----（此处是破折号）lauching（发起，发动）a nationwide education campaign,setting up relvant laws and regulations,and the list goes on.（36字）
三段
To conclude,it is high time that much importance were attached to such cases .And it is imperative （necessary）actions be taken to curb（扭转不好的趋势）such practices（综上所述，结论如下：早该重视这种现象了）.There is reason to believe that as long as all the society ,the authorites and the mass media and every one involved ,make concerted effort to strive hard,such upsetting stories will ultimately be ended or at least reduced.
注释：
All the society,the authorites and the mass media and every one involved 是用来扩充用的，如果自己觉得空间不够，可以省略1，2个不写
“There is reason to believe that ”可以删除，句子意思不变
第一段双号版
What on earth can we derive from（从什么中获得）this interesting and instructive drawing?It goes without saying that (=There is no denying the fact that 毋庸置疑)what the painter virtually aims to convey is profound. Primarily ,we can learn that such cases are far from being (=not) rare and upsetting (令人心痛的) parallels (类似的事情) can be found any there from our neighborhood and around the world. What’s more,there has been a growing (=more and more) society would be
like years later if this pervasive trend (肆虐的趋势) goes unchallenged (放任下去)。Additionally ,to reverse (扭转) the grim situation,effective measures should be entailed （定制）by al parties concerned .Enhancing people’s awareness of such practices (行为) and setting up relevant rules and regulations ought to be top priorities (首要任务) of the agenda. (议事日程) 注释：在第二段中几乎没写东西（指考生完全用的板子，没添加任何东西就可以用），希望考生能够自己根据能力修改，删除，增加一些东西。
第三段
Judging (非谓语动词) from all argument offered above ,we may safely arrive at the conclusive that it is high time that such stories were terminated or at least reduced.I’m strongly convinced that only when such happenings (事情) come to an end,can we maintain a happy ,healthy and harmonious society (和谐社会) as well wish.
单号
1. 双漫画
所有的单数改复数，当然有一些地方时不能修改的哦
2. 讽刺
“Additionally到末尾”删除，我们将其修改为举例（例下）
Let’s come to an example concerning .an acquaintance of mine ,which serves well as a good example to the point……
第三段句子中的curb修改为ensure
第三段最后一句“such upsetting 。。。。。。”全删，修改为
We can maintain a happy ,a healthy and harmonious society as we all wish.
双号
非讽刺修改
1. 第二段中primarily句中删除upsetting
2. 第二段中what’s more 一句删除，“worsening”
3. It’s hard……if we fail to guasp such cases and can’t put them into pratices
4. 把Additionally——段尾换成“举例“
To make the point even clearer,let’s come to an example regarding
An acquaintance of mine
That it is high time all parties concerned took effective and efficient measure to practice . The authorites the mass media ,aswell as each invidual are involved And I’m strongly convinced that we’ll properly ensure such practices,thus maintaining a happy, heathy society as we all wish.
1， 开头段：
1. Whoever in front of this image will be very much/highly/greatly
amused/interested/shocked/striked。How interesting and enlightening it is!What is
conspicuously/clearly illustrated/presented/portrayed in the drawing above is that__ + 描述图). Odd and funny as it seems/looks to be, such/this happening/ practice/ phenomenon/ story./ case/ event are so pervasive/ widespread that we can’t afford to ignore them .
2.what an amusing and interesting painting it is! It is indicative of common, yet serious social phenomenon:描述+补充描述.However ridiculous and farfetched, as the above image looks/seems to be, the drawer obviously intends for deeper meanings than what is shown superficially.
3.How interesting and instructive the above painting it is.It is so funny that whoever in front of it cannot help laughing: 描述+补充描述，simple as the image seems to be, the intended/implied meaning goes far deeper. What on earth does the picture reallys aim to mirror?
第二段：1.There is no denying the fact that/Obviously, we can earily define what the drawer intends/aims/attempts to reflect to us, and the strong and dear message
suggested/communicated/presented have is that+主旨：
2.It goes without saying that +主旨
3.This drawing goes far more than/beyond a simple/mere drawing. Indeed, it carries a
thought-provoking social implication:+主旨
4.What the drawing vividly presents goes far beyond a simple drawing. Instead, it carries important implications: 主旨
论据: 1.It is alarming that similar events are available in nearly all walks of life, and one of my former clloeages may serve as a good example+例子
2.Nowhere in history has the issue(of+主旨) been concerned so much as in our society.
3.It should be observed that upsetting parallels can be readily found anywhere in all walks of life.
A case in point is an acquaintance of mine, who +举例,According to a survey(conduct by CCTV/china daily last October, 78.6% of the people (主旨)one following the tide）
“__” says Dr wang，中国科学院院士，“----“
1/2/3+Failure to realize the severity of this grim situation will inevitably decrease our chances of success. And failure to come up with countermeasures will do more harm to our country.Provided
/If such stories go unchallenged it is hard imagine what our society will be like years later. Indeed, all.
第三段：1.Much can be done what tops the agenda, I deem, is to help people develop a position and wholesome outlook on life as well as the world and to cultivate noble and worthy value and gualities among them. Moreover, we should appeal to the government to take nationwide prompt actions. All the society should make sustained and concertal efforts to curb such practices. Only in these ways can we maintain a happy, healthy and harmonious society as we all wish.Although it is easier said than done, there are good reasons to expect that such case will be terminally ended or at least significantly reduced
2.Just as an ancient chinese philosophic book concludes,…,“All that is needed for the prevalence of a mislead is that good people do nothing.” To begin with, schools and mass media should serve as a counterbalance to the upsetting/worsening/gimp trend, doing their utmost to develop worthy values and qualities among people and awakening people of they rowing threat of this
phenomenon. What is more/Beside, the administration should play a dominant role in taking nationwide prompt actions. Fortunately,due attention has been paid and effective measures have been encouraged. This is a promising start, although there is still a long way for us to go.
3To paraphrase 19th philosopher xx “….” I’m strongly convinced that the authorities, schools and mass media should communiate their positive and instructive messages to the public actively and forcefully, lest this kind of grim situdion go unchallenged. If positive and effective measures can be well under way, it may not be long for us to get an easy breath(have a h..,h… society as we all wish) If good people do nothing,there is a real possibility that such trend will turn into a dreadful handicap, thus posing a threat to the solid growth of our society.